What to improve:
I could have found even better quotes to support my answers and I could have created a better conclusion that would have summerized even more what the answer to my question was.
What I did well:
I had few gramaitcal errors and I provided good insight into my question and how my sources answered my question.
Indian Horse is a novel that follows the life of Saul, a young aboriginal boy who faces the hardships of living in a residential school. He uses his love for hockey as a way to escape and cope. I would definetly recommend reading this novel, it discusses many complex themes and is a sad and heartwarming novel.
What to improve:
I think that we could have added more imagery to make it even more powerful and we could have rehearsed more together to have a better presentation.
What I did well:
We collaborated really well together to create something that I am really proud of. We chose a topic that we thought was very relevent and important right now. I also think that we did a good job presenting it in front of the class.
What to improve:
I need to make sure that I cut any unnecessary words and deadwood. To make my writing more concise. I could also have included more voice to provide more insight.
What I did well:
I had few grammatical errors and I provided good imagery with descriptive writing.
The short story “There Will Come Soft Rains” written by Ray Bradbury, explores the idea of a dystopian society and Mother Nature vs. technology. I believe that even though we aren’t as technologically advanced as Ray Bradbury thought we would be, I think that the story suggests what our future could look like. I think that over the next few years our society will be moving in the direction of becoming completely reliant on technology even more so than we are now. Technology has been made to try and make our lives easier, but like the story, the technology we have now isn’t necessarily helping us. I think that it will make it harder for us to be independent in the future. I thought that the irony of the atomic bomb destroying everything, including the humans, but the technological house was untouched was intriguing because the house was built with hundreds of technological gadgets to help humans and yet they were destroyed by technology. In the end of the story, a large tree fell onto the house causing a fire to break out and slowly destroy the house. I thought Bradbury’s use of situational irony in how the house was so technologically advanced and yet it couldn’t put out the fire and save itself was fascinating, because it illustrated that Mother Nature may outlast technology and showed that She is continually more powerful. I believe that Mother Nature will forever be more powerful than technology because of the capabilities that She possess and that She is uncontrollable and unpredictable. She has the ability to create natural disasters that can destroy towns, buildings and the people that live there.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Pqknd1ohhT4
In the video Dove Legacy, produced by Dove US, a group of women were asked how they felt about their bodies. They were told to make a list of all the different things that they disliked and liked about their bodies. They each pointed out their flaws, naming more things that they didn’t like about themselves than things that they loved. They each had different parts of their bodies that they wished they could change, some their nose or eyes and others their arms or thighs. They also asked their daughters the same question. The young girls also made a list and were then asked to compare it to their mother’s. The reactions of their mothers showed how unaware, surprised and disappointed they were to see how similar their lists were. The women hadn’t realized how much their daughters had picked up on and that how they felt about themselves reflected how their daughters also felt about their bodies. At such a young age these girls look up to their mothers and if they are taught that how they look isn’t beautiful than they will believe that. Humans typically focus on their personal flaws which can negatively impact their self-perception and the way their children and others see themselves as well. This video shows how humans negative self-image affects subsequent generations and that the perception of self-beauty, that should be positive.
“Ignorant and naive, he fell to his death, never knowing.”
