I really like the way you set up your characters and your interpretation of the setting they were in. Firstly, Having them in a sort of office at the end and at the beginning helped me understand what was going on in the story; that the old man wanted to purchase something. Secondly, The expressions and positions that your characters had really helped communicate what the characters were feeling at that specific moment in the story. There are a couple spelling mistakes, but other than that it was very effective in showing me what was happening in the story. Good job!
I like the way you used the character expressions to show what exactly the mean when they say it. It helps me understand the story better.
I really like the way you set up your characters and your interpretation of the setting they were in. Firstly, Having them in a sort of office at the end and at the beginning helped me understand what was going on in the story; that the old man wanted to purchase something. Secondly, The expressions and positions that your characters had really helped communicate what the characters were feeling at that specific moment in the story. There are a couple spelling mistakes, but other than that it was very effective in showing me what was happening in the story. Good job!
I like the way your characters expressions fit with your text because it helps understand what they are feeling.