Grade 12

Essay Correction

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Countee Cullen


Langston Hughes

Reflection:
I was very happy to hear Mrs.Thomasen saying that some of my writing was “smart”, and my essay was “well researched”. With English being my second language, it’s very delightful to receive such a comment from my English teacher, and that’s something I’m really proud of. The other aspect that has been improved about my writting is that I’m better at jointing the seperate pieces of information together and let the meaning make sense for the English speakers, because the word order in Chinese is so different from that in English. And it takes time for me to get used to switch my language expression back and forth when I’m in different situations with different people.
And of course, there are many flaws I should fix and so many things I want to do better next time. The first thing that’s definitely going to be improved is my vocabulary. As all my friends know, I love reading. So I’ll have read more novels, poems, proses, and everything we learn in class by the time we write our second essay; I hope I could use more sholarly and professional words, to make my essay look more mature. People should never be satisfied with the vocabulary they’ve already grasped, I can’t say I know all the words in Chinese, even though it is my mother toungue; there are so many ancient phrases and idioms I don’t understand, and learning more vocabulary is anctually so much fun. The other thing I want to do better in is that I really don’t want to write LONG, tedious, endless sentencess about a simple opinion! And this is like my biggest drawback whenever I start to write. I’m really bad at summarizing my ideas and making them short, sometimes I say a whole bunch of gibberish to explain the simplest idea, guess part of it is because I enjoy reading books like “Catcher in the Rye”– books having the charaters just keep talking withour an aim… I’m working on shorten my opinion by paying more attention to native speakers’ speaking skills. It is really helpful to improve this weakness when I have the language environment; as far as I know, there are some words with the meaning that can conclude a whole sentence in English, and that’s one of the reasons why I love English.

16 Personalities–Mediator

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I am a Mediator. I’m idealistic, poetic, and creative. I value harmony, and dislike competitions. Knowing my personalities would inspire me to fully use my strengths, develop careers I would do well in, and improve my weaknesses, in order to have a wholesome personality and be more adapt to this society. Knowing others’ traits would help us to get alone with each other, and how to work efficiently and productively as a group. These tests are flawed becuase our personalities keep changing as we get influenced by our environment and experiences; having a specific personality type as results now doesn’t mean that we’re always going to be exactly the same in the future.

Climate Change Solution Images

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URL: https://www.climatevisuals.org/images?f%5B0%5D=theme%3ASolutions&id=1197
Location: Dhaka, Bangladesh
Date:not found

Description: There’re two people in the image that trying to recycle a big pile of shoes by collecting them and selling them to the industries who would like to source the materials of shoes and then process them into raw materials that they then sell.

Assessment from me: I think it’s pretty effective a way to reduce our waste shoes. We just did a project called “precycling” for the last few weeks, and I learned that it’s necessary to recycle clothes and everything else that’s recyclable after using them for once because the landfill is too few for us to put all our garbages there.
Comparing with Canada where export most of the recyclable waste to other countries, people in Bangladesh should feel lucky to have some industries who want to recycle the produces for them.

URL: https://www.climatevisuals.org/images?f%5B0%5D=theme%3ASolutions&id=1080
Location:peru, Cusco
Date: 2014
Description: People are building with “low CO2 bricks” in Peru. It’s a method to reduce the emissions of CO2 by using electrically powered ventilation. They store bricks for some days before loading them into the kiln.

Assessment: I don’t think it would help to reduce the emissions of CO2 a lot because it’s not a very scientific method that’s been proved by experts. They seem to use physical method only so it’s not very persuasive to me.