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In my narrative essay, 2 things I would change for next time is

1) cutting out all of the dead wood-eliminating any unnecessary words, sentences, etc

2)  I would use more imagery throughout my writing and really focus on the concept of ‘show, don’t tell’

2 things I thought I did well were

1) I think I had good sentence fluency throughout my narrative; I experimented with both long and short sentences for effect

2) I believe I made the essay really personal and I included a lot of details that I recalled from the events I wrote about