The document would not embed into this post, So I had to take screenshots of them and put it in here. All of the correction advice you gave me was tried to be imputed into this correction page of my narrative.

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“Show not tell”

“Start a new paragraph when there is a new dialogue”

“Don’t repeat the same words”

“Don’t make the dialogue awkward’

I tried my best to make the changes.

Luka Mladenovic