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^ Corrected Essay ^

Re-reading the essay I found that I did very well with intergrading the quotes. I never had any quote bombs and they always flowed nicely with the sentence. Additionally, they always matched well with my arguments and mad the sentence stronger. Moreover, I found that my conclusion was very well written. I rewrote my thesis if anything in a better way than it was stated in my introduction and I had a very intriguing least sentence.

While, I did do somethings that were good, I also had many things that i didn’t do so well on. One of those things was my thesis in my introduction. I tried to make it too deep but it ended up being very confusing and it was hard to depict on who I thought was responsible for the destruction of the island. Finally, the last thing that I can do better for next time is my writing. I did not have words that had a deep meaning they were very plain and basic. Not to mention I misspelled many words and failed to keep it in present tense.

Overall I believe I did pretty good but am aware of my mistakes and will for sure keep them in mind for next time.