Editing Practice

Feb. 5

Task #1 – Read through the student example below.  We will edit it together as a class.

 

Like a dream
Tom was a cute puffer and he lived in the sea.He happy everyday and little fish were he favorite food.He had so many friends,they liked swim through the corals and played hide-and-see.Tom had a very wonderful unique skill,he can become a ball.His friends all like his this unique skill and he was very happy with that.

One day,Tom with his friends played hide-and-see and he hided behind a coral.And he saw a strange net under the he. Suddenly the net went up very fast,Tom tried to describe being caught in the net, and the experience in the aquarium in more detail.And then,he feel he can’t breathed.Some seconds later,he fell in the water,but not sea water.Tom feel so scared and sad,because he lost the way to went back home.In this 3 years,Tom staid in a aquarium.He saw so many people looked at he,and Tom was never happy in this time.
3 years ago,he left that aquarium.On the way to the next aquarium,he saw a sea.He remembered that is his hometown.He was so exciting.and he tried to jump out.He succesed but not in the sea,he jumped on the beach.He can’t breath but he feels comfortable.He was become to the die. He had a dream,in his dream,his mum kissed he,his father hugged he and his friends played with he,he had a beautiful dream.

 

Task #2 – Complete the edited version of the story below:

Like a Dream

Tom was a cute puffer who lived deep in the sea.  Even though Tom was quite fat, he was the fastest puffer fish around.  He had small eyes and was covered in spikes. He was happy every day.  He loved to eat all different types of little fish from the sea.  He thought they were all very delicious. Tom also had so many friends. They liked to swim through the corals and liked to play hide-and-seek. Tom had a very wonderful and unique skill.  He could become a gigantic poisonous ball. His friends all liked his unique skill and he was very happy with that.

One day, Tom was playing hide-and-seek with his friends and he hid behind a huge black coral. Suddenly, he saw a strange net under him and then it went up very fast. The next thing Tom saw was the inside of an aquarium.

Descriptive Writing Lesson #3

Feb. 3

Task #1 – Go over Adjective Word Bank

Task #2 – Write a short story about one of the images below as the inspiration for your story.  Please give your story a title and be as descriptive as possible.  Your draft will be due for tomorrow’s class.  Please make sure it is done to the best of your ability as it will be edited in class tomorrow.  Have fun!

Desrciptive Writing Image 1 Desrciptive Writing Image 2 Desrciptive Writing Image 3 Desrciptive Writing Image 4 Desrciptive Writing Image 5 Desrciptive Writing Image 6 Desrciptive Writing Image 7 Desrciptive Writing Image 8

Posting, Editing, and Review Adjectives

Feb. 2

Task #1 – We’re going to practice commenting on the blog today by having each of you post an example of the simple sentences you transformed.

** Remember, this is a public document so everyone can see what you are posting.  Select your best example.

Follow the steps below but use today’s example not the lesson below:

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** Edit the rest of your sentences **

Task #2 – Go to noredink.com and sign up for an account.  If you already have an account, update your profile and make sure you log in with the class code – afafafa3

Task #3 – Go over adjective lesson and adjective vocab.  Students will need to complete Reviewing Adjectives Practice #1 noredink.com following the lesson

Posting Comments and Adjectives Practice

Feb. 2

Task #1 – We’re going to practice commenting on the blog today by having each of you post an example of the simple sentences you transformed.

** Remember, this is a public document so everyone can see what you are posting.  Select your best example.

Follow the steps below but use today’s example not the lesson below:

15-09-2015 8-44-29 AM

15-09-2015 8-53-36 AM

** Edit the rest of your sentences **

Task #2 – Go to noredink.com and sign up for an account.  If you already have an account, update your profile and make sure you log in with the class code – aeef4ck4

Task #3 – Go over adjective lesson and adjective vocab.  Students will need to complete Using Adjectives Practice #1 noredink.com following the lesson

Descriptive Writing Lesson #2

Feb. 1

Task #1 – Take turns reading your descriptive examples from Friday’s work to a partner in and try to guess what each of you are trying to describe. Please do this with two different partners.

Task #2 – Transforming the following simple sentences

Example:

He walked the dog.

On Sunday morning, Steve happily walked his tiny black poodle through Stanley park with girlfriend while enjoying their Starbucks coffee they bought on Granville Street before they set out on their perfect Autumn date together.

Transform the following sentences:

  1. She played soccer
  2. He liked her
  3. The food was good
  4. I like/hate math
  5. He loves basketball
  6. She was happy
  7. I love the rain
  8. Summer is my favourite

 

Attached are two word banks that will be of use to you:

Adjective Word Bank

Sensory Words