Feb. 5

Task #1 – Read through the student example below.  We will edit it together as a class.

Like a dream
Tom was a cute puffer and he lived in the sea.He happy everyday and little fish were he favorite food.He had so many friends,they liked swim through the corals and played hide-and-see.Tom had a very wonderful unique skill,he can become a ball.His friends all like his this unique skill and he was very happy with that.

One day,Tom with his friends played hide-and-see and he hided behind a coral.And he saw a strange net under the he. Suddenly the net went up very fast,Tom tried to describe being caught in the net, and the experience in the aquarium in more detail.And then,he feel he can’t breathed.Some seconds later,he fell in the water,but not sea water.Tom feel so scared and sad,because he lost the way to went back home.In this 3 years,Tom staid in a aquarium.He saw so many people looked at he,and Tom was never happy in this time.
3 years ago,he left that aquarium.On the way to the next aquarium,he saw a sea.He remembered that is his hometown.He was so exciting.and he tried to jump out.He succesed but not in the sea,he jumped on the beach.He can’t breath but he feels comfortable.He was become to the die. He had a dream,in his dream,his mum kissed he,his father hugged he and his friends played with he,he had a beautiful dream.

Task #2 – Complete the edited version of the story below:

Like a Dream

Tom was a cute puffer who lived deep in the sea.  Even though Tom was quite fat, he was the fastest puffer fish around.  He had small eyes and was covered in spikes. He was happy every day.  He loved to eat all different types of little fish from the sea.  He thought they were all very delicious. Tom also had so many friends. They liked to swim through the corals and liked to play hide-and-seek. Tom had a very wonderful and unique skill.  He could become a gigantic poisonous ball. His friends all liked his unique skill and he was very happy with that.

One day, Tom was playing hide-and-seek with his friends and he hid behind a huge black coral. Suddenly, he saw a strange net under him and then it went up very fast. The next thing Tom saw was the inside of an aquarium.