A Halt in Society

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What I did well :

  1. I believe the introduction to each paragraph and comparisons to other real-life situations were very well done.
  2. The way the arguments were tied into over-arching similar themes (History, music, and freedom of speech).

Improvements needed:

  1. There were many informal words used and ideas that could have been phrased differently.
  2. I could have expanded on more examples of my arguments rather than saying the same things different ways.

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