2 Things I did Well
- I added quotes that were relevant and helped support my argument. I selected the right quotes and integrated them at appropriate times.
- My essay was very organized and well-structured. Ideas were separated and the format of the essay was correct.
2 Things I Want to Improve
- I did have a lot of vagueness, “Deadwood” and repetition that I would like to cut out next time.
- I would like to add some more creativity to my introduction, hook, and conclusion. I definitely need to add a more interesting hook to make it more attention-grabbing.
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