Corrections Synthesis Essay – How Does One Cope with Hardship in Residential School?

Correction – Synthesis Essay (Indian Horse-Sugar Falls)-2bo1xo7


Two things I did well:
I paid attention to details and worked hard to get it right.
Organize it on the outline logically to prepare for the final one.

Two things I need to improve:
Add more details and relevant quotes
Minor formatting issues

Indian Horse by Richard Wagamese

Sugar Fall by David Alexander Roberton

Narrative Essay Corrections | Core-Competencies-Self Assessment

Here is my narrative corrections and Spoken Word Self-Assessment.

Core-Competencies-Self-Assessment-Word-1p08z9z-s4yqsnNarrative Essay Final – Near Death Experience 1-2mmzdk9

Narrative Essay Final – Near Death Experience 1-2mmzdk9

Reflection for Narrative Essay :

I’m so proud of my narrative essay because I truly to share my story experience to anyone. Besides that, it taught me how to organize my idea on paper like brainstorm first and help my thinking skills more stronger.

Food and You – Correction

Name: Kirby, Nguyen Anh Dung

Date: October 1st, 2018

Food and You

High-quality Vietnamese cuisine

Green Lemongrass restaurant in Vancouver is special to me because it sells all of the Vietnamese traditional delicacies, and the taste reminds me of my memories when I was still in Vietnam.

My first impression, it is not a simple Vietnamese restaurant like others in Vancouver. This restaurant has heavy Vietnamese accents with décor that can reflect dramatic scenes from a lot of Vietnamese tourist attractions. The menu items are inspired by famous Vietnamese authors. Besides, they use agricultural materials to decorate the atmosphere; they masterfully combine the modernity of the West and the modesty of the traditional Vietnamese culture. It is simple and brightly lit. The outside makes it look newer and more modern than it is on the inside. The atmosphere makes me feel like I am eating in my home country because there is a lot of typical furniture (wooden table) with the pictures of tourist attractions (Bana Hills, Hoi An, Danang City) in Vietnam. Immortal love songs (ballad) of Vietnam in the 1980s resound with melodies just like my beautiful memories of my grandma singing to me every night. I was also fascinated by the unique but familiar taste of a bowl of pho recreated by the staff.

As soon as I entered with Andrea (my homestay mom), we were greeted and told to sit where ever we wanted. We sat down at our seats, and they brought us some tea and menus. Their menu is quite extensive, offering a variety of dishes: slight variations of noodle bowls, rice dishes, spring rolls, salad rolls, etc. I decided to choose a rare round steak and beef balls with lychee on ice. My host mom chose lemongrass chicken and pork chops rice, papaya, salad rolls (she asked for extra peanut sauce) and dried beef. The food came out right away, and it was extremely tasty. First of all, it was very traditional with great presentation. Our papaya salad with dried beef was a great starter, tasted nice and fresh. Our egg rolls were wrapped in rice paper (Vietnamese style), and they tasted great. The broth for the pho was not too salty, and I did not feel thirsty after eating it. The soup was flavorful; the tomato added a nice tang, the beef is tender, and the noodles were cooked just right. I also noticed that the plate of bean sprouts was very clean and the veggies were not old at all. There was also plenty of basil, and they have also included a chili and traditional Vietnamese vegetables (cilantro). The service was good, and the friendly staff gave us some extra dessert. Just by writing this, I can recall the fresh scent of lemongrass, the steam coming from my noodle bowl and many other remarkable smells that reminded me so much of home.

It brings and holds a lot of memories and amazing experiences of my country while I’m living far away from home. The prices and service are cheaper with the others in Vancouver. The real value here is the fantastic ambiance and a great bowl of Pho noodles or a plate of rice. Of all the Vietnamese restaurants along Kingsway street, this one is definitely worth a return visit. I highly suggest this restaurant to anyone who wants to try Vietnamese food to visit Green Lemongrass in order to get a traditional, authentic taste of Vietnam.

(576 words)

Reflection :

I proud of my great imagery with variety idea about Pho noodle. I think I tried my best to use academic vocabulary and grammar to make my essay more interesting to you (reader) but still have some big mistake on grammar. I hope next time I can work more on grammar so my essay will be better to get the distinction mark because my goal is not only an average mark like around 60-70%. I will study hard to get a high mark (over 80%)

Paragraph Corrections – How does bullying affect our life ?

How does bullying affect our life ?

The Thirteen Reasons Why Tv shows, which is based on the best-selling books by Jay Asher tells the story about teenager Clay… He returns home from school to find a mysterious box with his name on it lying on his porch. Inside, he discovers a group of cassette tapes recorded by Hannah Baker, his classmate and crush who tragically committed suicide two weeks earlier. On the tape, Hannah unfolds an emotional audio diary, detailing the thirteen reasons why she decided to end her life. Through Hannah and Clay’s dual narratives, Thirteen Reasons Why weaves an intricate and heartrending story of confusion and desperation about Hannah Baker who was bullied by friends in school. She was “slut-shaming with girls” to push the young girl to darkness depressed. Humans can be barbaric, irresponsible about their acts; we need to speak up and against “school-violence” and the heedless attitude of people around to survive the people get out of the deep darkness. This book, also a Tv series how bully affects our life. Sometimes the smallest gesture of ignorance and apathy can push someone to become desperate and give up of hope to alive.

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