Synthesis Essay Corrections

This is a final edited version of my synthesis essay:

Two things I’m proud of:                                                                                                                                          -I am proud that I learned how to format my quotes properly                                                                – I am also proud that my grammar has improved since last year

Two things I would like to improve on:                                                                                                              -Using more formal language                                                                                                                                – Make my introduction clearer

Bruno’s mom when she finds out she lost her son:

This scene was very important because it showed the irony that her son died in a camp and her husband was the one who ran the camp. This relates to my essay because of the change in perspective after a tragedy.

Schindler near the end of the movie:

This was also an important picture because it shows Schindler crying in a Jewish person’s arms. This relates to my essay because it shows a former nazi hugging a Jewish person which could be done with a change of perspective.

 

 

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