Two things I did well on this persuasive paragraph would be my thorough research and evidence as well as my writing structure. I think my thorough research allowed me to bring the strongest pieces of evidence from my viewpoint into my argument nicely which aided in making my argument very persuading. I also think my writing structure complimented my argument nicely and made it easy to read and understand my argument.
What I would like to improve on next time would be cleaning up my sentences even more. Although I did well on grammar and sentence fluency, I think I could improve even more by cleaning up sentences to make them even easier to read.