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Journal Response #1 – The Hockey Sweater

Journal Response:” The Hockey sweater”

  1. I liked the first paragraph. The starting sentence was a complete sentence, and the conclusion sentence seemed to finish off the first pargraph well. It also told us a little bit of the background story. The last paragraph was okay. I thought it was kind of flat. Ended very short like and not like you would have expected. The mood created by the opening paragraph is happy.
  2. The way I can relate to this story is that I was never allowed to wear makeup when all my friends wore makeup. My mom would leave to work before me so I would some of hers on. But after school I would get in trouble. But all I wanted to do is fit in.