Two thing I think I did well while writing my narrative essay are my details and my dialogue. Two things I think I could improve on are insert semicolons in my writing to make it look good and improving my sentence fluency.
This is my persuasive essay that I did my corrections for.
Things I did well: The hard work I put in on writing my essay, my choice of words, and my proper formatting for quotes in the essay.
Things I could improve on: One main thing is to explain myself better and understand that the reader may not know as much detail about novel as me, as well as improve my sentences and make them more parallel to have more flow.
Why Simon Would Be My Boyfriend
Have you ever wanted a boyfriend that you can be really close with? Well, in the novel “Lord of the Flies” by William Golding, there is one character by the name of Simon that would fit the role perfectly.
Reason #1: He shares his Food
Simon is a very caring person, Simon gave his food away to Piggy, who didn’t get a chance to eat the meat. Food is very important to me and to have a boyfriend that shares his food has the best quality a boyfriend could ever have.
Reason #2: He Would Never Hurt a Butterfly
Simon would never hurt a soul. I would never be scared to be with simon, because he would never want to harm me. He would only want to make me happy. Simon and I would also own a pet, because he would treat our dog or cat like family and not a rodent.
Reason #3: Simon Seems Older
Simon seems much older than what he is, which says more than the selection of boys I get to choose from. He is mature, wise, and very understanding. Simon is also not becoming savage despite all of the influences around him. He stands his ground and sticks to his morals and values.
Simon would be the perfect guy for me. I love when guys share food, it’s all about the food. I love how I would be treated with care, I would never have to complain about his maturity level. Yes, he is younger than I am, but age is just a number. He sticks to what he believes, and I know that he would believe that we should be together forever. Simon would be a well rounded boyfriend, and be perfect for me.
Humans need to be able to communicate
Humans need to interact with others
Humans look for happiness
Humans want to express feelings
Humans need other to support
Humans are violent, mean and greedy
Humans hurt other humans and populations, they’re are discriminatory
Humans are vengeful
Humans are sympathetic and giving and helpful to others
Humans are oblivious when it isnt happening to us
Humans can be united by the simplest of things
Humans can find joy
The movie American Sniper is one of my favorite movie because it showed the different experiences people go through, the difference between countries and the differences between people. Watching the movie makes me think differently of Veterans I see on the street or in general. I have more respect for them than ever. They are brave to go and fight for their country despite knowing the risks. I don’t think that I would be able to do it. You have to be mentally strong, physically strong and extremely courageous.