Persuasive Essay Corrections: English 11

This is my persuasive essay that I did my corrections for.

Things I did well: The hard work I put in on writing my essay, my choice of words, and my proper formatting for quotes in the essay.

Things I could improve on: One main thing is to explain myself better and understand that the reader may not know as much detail about novel as me, as well as improve my sentences and make them more parallel to have more flow.