Category: English 9

Rumours ~ Mini Inquiry

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Rumours

By Jessica M

Should of kept quiet, not saying a word.

It’s a wildfire, burning up each tree

Cracking glass, as its reaching out carefree

 

Life is extraordinary, doesn’t mean

it will stay the same forever. Where here

lives the good, the greatest, the bad, the worst

 

There would be an end. There would be nothing

left to burn. Splitting would come to an end.

But what kind end, would it be. No one

 

In the world gets what they want, and

that is beautiful. Whatever happens

would affect something, actions connected.

 

You cared, you really did. But telling lies

will only make more lies. The power of

individuals was proven when the

rumours started to spread like fire and glass.

 

“Rumours” by Jessica M is a closed poem, because it’s sorted into stanzas, and each line is 10 syllables. It has some aspects of an open poem, because not every line rhymes, nor does it always finish the sentence in its line. The poem explores how our actions are interconnected, and how a person can make a change. The poem has metaphors like the fire spreading, and the glass splitting, making more cracks. Which gives it the title, rumours, as they can also spread unstoppably. The line “Life is extraordinary” seems to be inspired from Dead Poets Society, said by Mr. Keating. Another is from the novel, Ready Player One “No one In the world gets what they want, and that is beautiful.” It ties into the poem because of how when something spreads, the end result is not always what you want it to be. The poem seems to be about our actions interconnecting. Like when someone tells a person something, what stops them from spreading the info? After reading it, the tone seems to be giving us an insight into feeling some sort of guilt. How we lack seeing from a different point of view, giving us an unexpected outcome. Maybe the original person who told the second person about it, didn’t except them to tell everyone else, and now they feel guilty of doing so. We don’t know how much impact one person can make.

Grammar Video Project – “Modifiers – Misplaced and Dangling modifiers”

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Misplaced and dangling modifiers. They are similar, but not the same. Misplaced is when the thing your describing, is put in a wrong place causing it to sound weird or confusing. While dangling is when it’s not clear, or doesn’t make sense. Here are some examples. This one is a misplaced modifier.

“While she was jogging, Rose found a blue guy’s hat.”

In that example, how its written, it seems like the guy was blue. Since it says ‘Blue guy’s hat’ If you want it to make it so that the hat was blue, you would put it like,

“While she was jogging, Rose found a guy’s blue hat.”

Sometimes moving just a word would fix a misplaced modifier. Or you might need to move a couple of words. But for dangling modifiers, sometimes you need to add a few more words.

“While looking at the sun, the clouds started to rain.”

It’s not really clear who’s looking at the sun. Since ‘the clouds’ is right after, it sounds like the clouds are looking at the sun. So you need to add someone. Like add a subject.

“While I was looking at the sun, I saw the clouds were starting to rain.”

            It’s sometimes confusing to tell whether it’s a misplaced or dangling modifier. Dangling modifiers are usually missing something, like a person. So it would make the sentence unclear of who or what its describing. When you fix a dangling sentence, it usually takes a few more words, or sometimes rearranging the whole sentence. Misplaced sentences are describing the wrong thing. So that it sounds crazy or weird. All you need to do is move one or a few words so that it sounds normal again.

 

Misplaced and dangling modifiers – Mini test 

Fix the following sentences:

(Misplaced modifiers)

  1. They saw a bird behind the dog flying.
  1. Crying on the examination table, the doctor gave the small child his vaccine.

 

(Dangling modifiers)

  1. Raised in Texas, it is natural to like barbecue
  2. before finishing breakfast, the cereal was soggy
  3. At the age of 5, my father took me to Mexico

 

*ANSWERS*

#1 They saw a bird flying behind the dog 

Now the modifier describes the bird and not the dog.

#2 The doctor gave the small child crying on the examination table his vaccine.

The modifier now correctly describes the child as crying, not the doctor.

#3 Raised in Texas, I natural to like barbecue 

Now there’s a known subject and we know who was raised in Texas.

#4 Before I finished breakfast, my cereal was soggy 

We now have a subject and know for sure that the cereal was soggy before I finished breakfast

#5 When I was five, my father took me to Mexico

The original meaning of the sentence before it got transformed would mean that when my father was five years old his own father took him to Mexico which is not what the writer was implying

 

 

 

 

 

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