I think the things I did well in my essay are following the hero’s journey and having good cliff hangers. I feel that I followed the hero’s journey pretty well because it was just something I kept in my mind as I was writing, and I felt I left good cliff hangers at the end of my paragraphs to try and interest the reader even more.
I feel the things I need to work on are making my story overall more engaging because even though I think I had good cliff hangers I think that some parts of my story are “dead wood” meaning that it’s unnecessary and not that interesting to read, another thing I need to work on is being less direct because in this narrative essay it was about showing not telling and I think that I was too direct on different parts of the story and it didn’t make the reader wonder.