Lost in the Ocean – Corrections

 

 

Reflections :

What was well done:

  1. I believe the organization of past to present explained the message well.
  2. I liked the character change over the course of the climax.

Improvements needed :

  1. Organizing words and sentences to make more of an emotional impact.
  2. Spending more time on improving grammar and poetic devices.

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