(Stewart’s Driving Moment)

I have a hysterical story that has been passed down for a few years.  It’s about Stewart learning how to drive.  Stewart experiences watching his two older brothers, learning to drive but while he’s watching his brothers driving, Stewart is commentating on the how easy it is.  Stewart thinks that it will be a piece of cake for when his time comes.

“It’s not as easy as it looks” says our dad, when Stew thinks they’re complaining about nothing.

Before Stewart starts learning how to drive, he’s learning all the basics.  Stewart thinks that he’ll be able to do it no problem.  So, Stewart just starts plugging away with the studying process.  It starts getting difficult and he still studies for the knowledge test.  Stewart barely knows any of the signals and other things he needs to know.  When he goes to take the knowledge test, Stewart comes into the testing room all cocky, and ready to show what he can do.  The first time Stewart took the test, it was a big fat FAIL!  The second time he took the test it was another big fat FAIL!  The third time he took the knowledge test, you ready for this one?  Stew passed.

Stewart passes the knowledge test and now he’s learning to drive.  Stewart comes into the car thinking he’s the big man on campus.  With an extraordinary smile on Stew’s face, he comes behind the wheel, thinking that this will be way easier than the knowledge test.  My dad starts by teaching him the basics: stopping, starting, coasting, turn signals, mirrors etc.  Stewart does okay with that and then he thinks he can start parking.

My dad doesn’t think Stewart’s ready to drive yet.  He teaches him to turn around corners, stop at intersections, to use turn signals, and other driving basics.  My dad’s teaching Stewart how to park in different types of parking spots.

“Look through the rear-view mirror, “while backing the rig,” our dad says.

While he’s backing up, he’s way over the lines of the parking spot.  He comes out of the car saying, “I think, I’m ready to start doing some real driving.”

After a few more lessons and lectures on driving, my dad asked Stewart to start driving on his own in the parking lot.  Stewart was very happy and excited to be on his own and work his magic.  He was so happy, that he ignored everything my dad taught him how to drive.

Soon, before you know it, Stew’s on his journey on his own driving.  Since Stewart thinks that he can do it no problem, he already goes into the most difficult techniques that’s needed to know for driving coming up.  Stewart thinks he already has his drivers licence.  So, he starts driving like nobody’s business, and he turns on some music.  “How could I drive without my tunes”?  He doesn’t just turn it on, he cranks it.  Stewart has it at the full throttle so the floor of the car is shaking when he has it on.  Soon enough he starts to think that he can do whatever.

“Since I got everything else down pat, why not I start driving like the professional, I am.  I’ve already made the cut.  Also, I don’t have that much driving left before I get my driver’s license and go places.  That’s me in a year.  It’s a piece of cake.  How about I go practice parking in the parking lot again before, I go into the more difficult areas.  But I don’t have to worry about the difficulty, because, I’ve all ready mastered that.  I know what I’m doing.  I don’t have to worry.  I can see that my hands have a very firm grip on the steering wheel before I start driving away.  My foots on the gas.  My foot’s somewhat on the brake, and I can feel the seatbelt on my waist and on my chest.  I feel secure and safe.”

Stewart sees a parking spot and he thinks that he can squeeze the car in there no problem.  First, he makes sure that there are no cars around and that he has the volume up.  “Who doesn’t have their volume to the max while they are parking.”  Stewart likes to have his music loud so he makes sure that it can’t go any higher.  He starts to go into the parking spot.  Stewart thinks that he is going to hit the curb, but keeps going since his favourite song’s playing.  He is rocking out before he even notices he went over the curb.  No wait, he didn’t just go over the curb, Stewart went straight into this cement wall that destroyed the whole front of the car like nobody’s business.

My dad comes over wondering what had happened.  He asked Stewart “What the h*** happened?  Stewart can’t hear him because of how loud the music is.  My dad nocks on the window.  Stewart still can’t hear him.  My dad opens the door.  Then my dad turns down the music, and then yells what the F**K is going on here?!!

My brother Stewart is so out of it that he didn’t have a single idea about what was happening.

“Make sure you come into the car knowing what you’re doing next time.”  You totally destroyed the front of the car.

“Okay,” said Stewart.

“Now thanks to you, I have to fix the whole front of the car!”

“Do you realize how long this would take”?  “Yes, I do.”  “I’m sorry.”

“It’s still a lot of work for me.”

“I realize that, I’m sorry.”

“Okay then.”

Then that was the end of it.

What did I do well?

I thought, the story was very accurate.  It sounds very realistic.  It’s not made up.  I did a good job writing out the story so it’s not just reading words.  I created different types of imagery in the story.  It’s not boring.  It’s very reasonable.  The story takes place mostly inside a car so it’s very realistic and trustworthy.  I think I did a great job with the safety and reliability of the story.

What would I improve next time?

What I would improve next time, would to show the story more instead of telling it like I would to other people.  Keep, in mind this isn’t my story so it’s hard for me to show it like I would, if it was my actual story.  I would combine the sentences more better next time.  A lot of the story was quantity not quality.  Next time I would like to have more quality than quantity.  My story was very long I have to Admit.  It was a good story but it could have been more interesting.  Overall next time, I would have made the whole story more short and sweet.